Well, first things first. If you don’t continue writing and posting I’ll throw a hatchet at you.

Secondly. Hmmmm … let me think about it. I love the imagery you used. The windows are really nice. The atmosphere is good. I can’t really find anything wrong with it. The hands woven shut in sweet tender … sweet tender WHAT!!!!

Yip, that’s the only thing that annoyed me. THe rest was brilliant. And believe me, it’s not easy to get a compliment to spring forth from my lips … or in this case, my keyboard.

Wow, that was a comment I was no expecting. Very interesting idea, I’ve never tried that. I’ll definetely keep it in mind for when I write a poem I actually want to do something with. You see, I write a lot. I HATE writing school assignments. Okay, actually only if they are limited in time. But anyway, I love writing. Any, and I mean ANY, picture that floats into my head, any phrase that I like gets written down and incorporated into a poem or story. Never mind that I only write first chapters of my stories and never get any further …

Okay, that was a nice little ramble. I LOVE the advice, I live off comments on my writing that help me improve. But this peom is, in essence, nothing more than a doodle so I’m not going to spend too much time re-writing it. But I know, I know. Structure and rhythm are my weakest points and I know I should try and make EVERY piece worth while.